The Tale Of Mara (PART 1)

It was a cold snowy day in the middle of December. Christmas was near. and I was outside ploughing the snow from the front of the door, getting ready to go inside and warm up near the fire, when suddenly I looked down and saw dark spots in the white snow. It was snowing black ashes which could only mean one thing and one thing only….They were coming.  I threw the shovel on the ground and ran inside to tell my father. We had to hide and we had to hide fast. My dad grabbed me and hid me in the closet.I wanted him to stay with me but he said, “Stay put, everything will be alright, I will be back soon.” As I stayed hugging my torn up plush bear I shacked and waited as my dad instructed me.

I heard rumbling and I heard the fire, the forever burning fire, the symbol of the war, the symbol…of the Light Troops. They were an army,an army of rebels that wanted to rule the world with eternal pain and suffering.
I opened up the closet door a bit so I could see outside. My father was talking to a Light Troop, he looked official and scary at the same time. “Do you have the money?” said the man with a deep scary voice. “I..I do..but not all of it..you see it’s Christmas and I had to buy some more food..and…” my father replied to the man. “SILENCE PEASANT!” the man yelled. “You don’t have the money? Then you know what the price is…”

Alright, so that was part 1 of my story.Please let me know if you want these to be shorter or longer, or if there’s any suggestions you have. I would love to hear your opinion.What do you think will happen in part 2?

-Mara IW 3ic

9 Responses

  1. LONGER PLEASE! could you put me in please? dont make me die in the story… 😦 if you put me in the story and dont kill me in it then i won’t … i wont….. what do you want me to not do?

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    • you will probably be here in the story becaouse you were her when i first joined,im mainly putting characters that were here in December 2011 but i will also be putting some new ones as well

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  2. Can I be in?

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  3. Yay part 1 is earlyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy! I can tell this is going to be a good story XD

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  4. Grammar and layout fixed. Nice story so far Mara, keep going gurl. ❤

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  5. Ok, you have talent. These comments here are really right it’s an interesting story so far and I will follow along and keep checking the IW site for your stories. You could honestly take this talent and spread it out. You should make a blog for Ice Warriors.

    Hire staff from Ice Warriors to work on the blog, post your stories, news, philosophy all kids of things. Put the banner on the IW site and take it to another level. All kinds of armies have blogs. (The Stale Nacho, Positively ACP). Nice Job. 🙂

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  6. can i be in the story

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